Original:
But when he passed through the museum’s metal detectors and entered the crowded gallery, he saw that the other people at the exhibit of “Marc Chagall’s Russian Years” were little more than walking ghosts: his mother, his father, preserved in other people’s skin. Glimpsing the side of a woman’s head—a younger woman, of course, but another remarkable thing about the dead is that they are all ages, preserved at every age you ever knew them, and at no age at all—he had to fight the impulse to glance at the profile again, unwilling to feel the sick relief that came with confirming an unfamiliar face. It was easier to look at art.
Found Poem:
When he entered the gallery of ghosts
he saw them.
It was little more than an impulse
to feel the easy relief
that came with walking
through the remarkable exhibit.
They are preserved at no age at all,
with unfamiliar faces
that look at him through the years.
A profile of a younger woman he knew
fought against his unwilling glance-
he remembered the remarkable
and passed on through,
for it was easier to look at art.
I like how you kept with the same idea but made it more abstract. great post!
ReplyDeleteI love it. its different but has the same line at the end. you put a new twist to it and its amazing. i love the begging line. He entered the gallery of ghosts. it reminds me of walking through the past. Very good :)
ReplyDeleteI like how you took the more literal prose piece and made it symbolic and abstract, and made it your own :) fantastic job!
ReplyDeletei like how you put the original up with the one you changed. like lily kann said, it makes me think of walking through the past too
ReplyDeletewow, you really changed it around. I picture a completely different story with the one you wrote. Great job.
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